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The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.
The bar chart presents the number of international investments in the economy of
India
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 between 2014 and 2019.
Overall
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, capital expenditure in China declined steadily throughout the period;
however
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, it fluctuated in
India
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. Despite
this
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, the total amount of money invested in China was higher than in
India
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. The Chinese economy received just under 80
billion
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 in 2014, which fell to around 60
billion
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 in 2015 and 2016. After a slight decrease in 2017, there was a massive resurgence to a high point of more than 100
billion
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 in 2018 before dropping to just over 40
billion
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 in 2019. In 2014, international investment into
India
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's economy reached more than 20
billion
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;
then
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 it rose significantly to approximately 60
billion
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 in 2015 and 2016 before falling back to above 20
billion
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 in 2017. In 2018, there was another dramatic increase to just below 60
billion
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 before returning to around 20
billion
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 in 2019. 2015 was the only year that
India
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 exceeded China, with values of slightly over 60
billion
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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