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the graph below shows the number of tourists visitors to a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

the graph below shows the number of tourists visitors to a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The graph below illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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in
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to
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 a certain Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. In general,
it is clear that
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 tourism
in
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on
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this
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 Caribbean
island
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is
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has been
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 increasing gradually throughout the years. The figure for
visitors
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 who were staying on
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island
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the island
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 fluctuated during the period,
while
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were staying on cruise ships increased significantly between 2010 and 2017.
Total
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The total
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 of
visitors
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 who were visiting
this
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island
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 accounted for only one
million
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 in 2010, but
this
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number
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 grew steadily reaching a high point of 3.5
million
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tourists
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 in 2017.
Visitors
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 who chose to go on a cruise trip were less than half
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million
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a million
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tourists
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 during the
year
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of
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apply
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2010,
whereas
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 other
visitors
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 who were staying on the
island
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 were just over 0.5
million
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visitors
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. In the
year
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 2011, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who took a cruise ship rose to 0.5
million
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visitors
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,
however
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,
this
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number
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 just dropped back the
year
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 after to 0.3
million
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visitors
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 approximately. In 2016, the
overall
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number
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 of
tourists
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 was just under 3
million
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. In the following
year
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, the figure climbed to the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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of
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3.5
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million, tourists, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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