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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected ( as % of GDP) in five countries of 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected ( as % of GDP) in five countries of 4 years between 1975 and 2005
The provided table illustrates the amount of
tax
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 collected in five
countries
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 for four years between 1975 and 2005.
Overall
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, there was significant growth in the percentage of
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 revenue in Sweden, Korea, Japan and Turkey.
While
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 there were slight increases in the USA.
In addition
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, Sweden had the highest amount of
tax
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 collected. Regarding Sweden, starting a 46% in 1975, there was gradual growth in these
countries
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 over the next two decades, reaching a peak of 70.1% in 2005. Similar changes were seen in Japan, there was a notable rise from 15% to 32% in 2005.
In contrast
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,
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 collection in the USE accounted for one-quarter GDP of these
countries
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 in 1975, after which it rose slightly throughout the 30
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 period, ending at 27.4% Turning to the remaining
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 with fluctuations in 1975, just over 15 per cent of Korea's GDP came from
tax
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 collection but in 1985, the figure had almost doubled to 27.3%.
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, the percentage fell to 26% in 1955 before
recorvering
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 to and at 27.3%.
Similarly
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, Turkey's
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 revenue fell marginally to 15% in 1985 but
then
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 grew significantly in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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