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The concept of having English as a universal language is appreciated by many who feel that only one language in the world would help in many ways, while others criticize it, what is your opinion?

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people
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thinking
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 one
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 in the
world
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 could enhance more
advanatges
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advantages
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 many
people
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 oppose
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the subject.
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both views with ample reasons.
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 around
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the
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are thinking
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single
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a single
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language
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 would be better
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communicate
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. The one
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 helps feasible communication entire
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 and could better understand
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 update without
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due to
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 problem.
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benifits
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benefits
 are increasing
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jobs
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,
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and easy
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 to learn different
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culture
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cultures
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 and traditions. It helps
feel
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 free to travel around the geography.
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, increasing business
opportunites
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opportunities
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for instance
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Someone
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if Someone
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 from India
need
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branded
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 shirt from
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state
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 of America
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 freely contact directly to them
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language
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 might be
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a chances
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chances
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 to destroy their own
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 and traditions. The different
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 would be
great
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a great
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 diversity in the
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. Different
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language
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languages
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 and different
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culture
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cultures
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 would develop
variety
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a variety
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of style
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style
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styles
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to
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people
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,
movies
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 are the best example of different
languages
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. Indian
movies
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 are
priduce
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produced
produce
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languages
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. Chinese
movies
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 are doing their own
culture
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 and
languages
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.
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 why we are
intresting
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interested
to see
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in seeing
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 those
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. In conclusion,
single
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languae
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language
giving
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benifits
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benefits
 to
the
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all
people
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differnet
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different
languages
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 great the entire
world
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 to see different
people
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. Diversity is the most beauty in the life and
world
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph to explain the main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and correct spelling for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly.
task achievement
You presented both viewpoints on the topic, which is a good approach.
task achievement
Your examples are relevant and show understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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