The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018

The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018
The illustrated line graph represents the
addmissions
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admissions
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for five hospitals(Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton, Bardley and
Oxley
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), which are located in a European
counry
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country
, in a period from 2004 to 2018.
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, Bardley, Adlin, Stanton and Fortsmith hospitals witnessed
growing
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demand for their services, as opposed to
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fall
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in
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admissions's
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count
was
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perceived by
Oxley
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. In the start,
Oxley
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hospital
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had been at the top
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but became the lowest in weekly hospital
admissions
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by 2018 In detail, the most progressive in
admissions
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, Adlin
hospital
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begin
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from
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about 125 applications per week. Their number
fluctated untill
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fluctuated until
2010, when
it
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started steadily climbing and reached 250
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2018. People visiting Bardley in a week were increasing from 200 to over 250 in 8 years from 2004, but their count hit the low in 2014, becoming just under 250. It recovered to approximately 275 by the end.
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, Stanton's weekly
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doubled by 2012, going up to about 150, having started from about 75.
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was followed by
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around 25 in 2014 and
rise
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to above 150 onwards. Fortsmith's number varied slightly throughout the period, with roughly 175 weekly visitors at the
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beginning
,
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of about 225 in 2010,
drop
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to nearly 200 in 2012 and
the
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final of 200
admissons
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admissions
per week.
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,
Oxley
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drammatically
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dramatically
declined from under 250 to just over 100 between 2004 and 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oxley, admissions with synonyms.
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