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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter -say which points in the article you agree with -explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres -offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to raise my concern about
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article.
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 my point of view, the statement which you printed was partially right. Let me explain my situation, In India, every city
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 same outer structure and layout to attract more and more visitors.
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 of them are painted in a red colour,
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 them identical.
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, the interior of
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each building
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 a unique design.
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, the facilities
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provided by my area town centre
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 far different than others, as it has a large food court and a cinema as well, where people can enjoy
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 leisure time. These attractions make the area busy. If you can arrange a time for
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 of my
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metro city
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 will be pleased to take you on a short trip
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urban
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 centre. Yours Faithfully, Bhaumik Vyas.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize your main points.
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Use more simple sentences to express your ideas clearly.
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Expand on how your town center is different with more examples or details.
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Make sure to use formal language throughout the letter, especially in the closing.
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You clearly state your opinion about the article.
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You offer a guided tour which adds a personal touch to the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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