Some people believe that free housing should be provided by governments for under-priviliged and people who can't afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give example based on your own experience.

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world. A sector of clan
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that authority should give accommodation to
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individuals who have a low income, which is a
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fact. To commence, numerous justifications incline that the top-notch
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should accommodate the
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the
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poor humans. First and foremost,
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person
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do not have sufficient
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balance
to buy a house and they become homeless, as it
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the
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image by having more and more homeless people and wealthy humans decline to reside
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surrounding. A statistical survey analysis done by a prestigious newspaper states that
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population declined by 70% in the past 2 years because of
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the road or in
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public
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, having no house
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live
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in encourage
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humankind towards crimes
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drugs, and they will
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used to
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suppliments
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of the metropolitan
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cabinet should arrange public housing
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, providing the funds for other developments
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necessary. The striking factor behind
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can boost
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economy by
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each man and woman, they will be able to save more money and their survival
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inflation. An article published in
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that Ontario's
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minister reduced the carbon tax for each individual which resulted
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cheaper gas
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.
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, each
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territory
can work on their defence system, and build a powerful image worldwide.
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, government should have to focus on the growth of their states.
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Extracting
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concluded that humanity is
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,
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authority should put more focus on improving the life standard of their poor citizens. Hope, In the distant future, every minister will realize the importance of
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community
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and they will more focus
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them.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to present your ideas more clearly. Use simple, direct sentences to communicate your thoughts.
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Make sure each point you make directly supports your main argument. Some points seemed less connected to your main argument.
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Use clearer examples that are easy to understand and related to your points.
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You have introduced the topic and presented your opinion.
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You made some good points to support your argument regarding homelessness and the economy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • free
  • housing
  • governments
  • underprivileged
  • afford
  • buy
  • house
  • safe
  • place
  • live
  • need
  • stable
  • home
  • health
  • job
  • opportunities
  • improve
  • lives
  • families
  • children
  • secure
  • environment
  • grow
  • learn
  • living
  • costs
  • economy
  • taxes
  • fund
  • basic
  • need
  • met
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