Media coverage of violent crime frightens people and encourages criminals. Some people say it should be banned from newspapers and TV programmes. To what extend do you agree or disagree

One
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of the widely discussed issues nowadays is whether
newspapers
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and
TV
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programmes should be banned for encouraging
crime
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. First
things
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first it doesn’t matter we absolutely need
newspapers
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and
TV
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channels to know what is happening in the country and sometimes in the world. But if there’s something about
crime
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and you name it , it shouldn’t be banned.
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of the main reasons behind
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the public has the right to know what is happening in their society.
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clear example is , if some criminals could escape from prison ,
then
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using
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and other
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,
government
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can warn the people about the danger and same time help them. In 2000 years seven criminals
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escaped from
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prison and
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the camera’s
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camera’s
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system posted their faces on the
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show
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most wanted
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, after
that
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apply
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almost all
criminals
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the criminals
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were caught and
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last
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one
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committed suicide.
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, it can
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be argued about freedom of speech.
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people
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say, write and demonstrate what is true even if it’s about
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, If we ban news about
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then
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perhaps
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day government will ban other
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too or they could control what we should watch .
Instead
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of banning news , we have
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them because we should know the truth.Take
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North Korea.
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government takes control
all
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channels and doesn’t show foreign news or I can talk about Iran there
is
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same
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the same
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issues In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that banning something about
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from
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and
newspapers
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one
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is one
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of the worst
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that could happen. In my opinion . I disagree with
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