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Some students prefer to take a gap year between highschool and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people love to take a break
to
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 work or to travel for one
year
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 after they finish the
highscool
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school
 and
befor
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before
 they start the university
journy
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journey
, I believe the
disadvantahes
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disadvantages
 outweigh the advantages,
becuase
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because
 you will get away from books, and learning for a whole
year
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. Some people prefer to take
gap
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 after they finishing the highscool as a break, which means, during
this
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year
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 they may go
to
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 holiday or get a
jop
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job
 to get
an
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experienc
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experience
such
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 as working at a company,
resturant
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restaurant
, or even valanter at
schools
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school
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 to help the young studends and give them some tips to help theme during there studies. I think
this
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year
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 will not impact
on
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the students in a good way and will
couase
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cause
 a bad result
on
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for
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 them,
this
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 means that
,
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this
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beriod
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period
 will take you away from the
envairtmant
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environment
 of reading, and learning, and be a student and coming back after a
wheill
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while
 will be hard on them,
furthermore
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, your brain will believe that you do not have to study any more and you are already done of it. To
summuraize
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summarise
, taking a
breake befor
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break before
 you
begain
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begin
 your
journy
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journey
 at
the
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university has a lot of
disadvantahes becouase
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disadvantages because
 it will
convense
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convince
 your
braine
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brain
 that, you are done
studing
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studying
 and coming back after a
year
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 will be harder.

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language
Make sure to use correct spelling. Words like 'highschool', 'journy', 'disadvantahes', 'beriod', 'envairtmant', and 'summuraize' need to be corrected.
structure
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Start with a clear statement of your position and end with a strong summary of your ideas.
content
Try to use more examples and explanations to support your points. This will help the reader understand your opinion better.
strength
You have a clear opinion about the topic, which is a good start.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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