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In the future, robots and other forms of artificial intelligence may do the majority of the work that humans do today. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Is artificial
intelligence
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 considered as future of the world and it can be the power of
robots
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?
The
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computer
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 technologies positively enhance all forms of artificial
intelligence
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. Both artificial
intelligence
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 and
robots
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 are impacting our lives severely and they have advantages and disadvantages. In those days, the advantages of
computer
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 technologies include many sides which make our life simple. First of all,
computer
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intelligence
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 may finish the daily tasks in a short duration.
Artifial
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Artificial
intelligence
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 can arrange schedules by doing tasks rapidly so it makes some free time for people.
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, the ability of
robots
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 plays a significant role in increasing the level of production and
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 the load of
work
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.
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, the compound between artificial
intelligence
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 and
robots
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 is reducing human hand's error. There is a scientific study has shown that a high level of
work
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 which done in companies that use
computer
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technology
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 strongly. All of those benefits support the good side of
computer
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technology
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 because it does not represent the other face of them.
Artifical
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Artificial
intelligence
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 like any
specality
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speciality
 has a lot of weaknesses which are
depand
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depend
 on many sides
such
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 as internet and power demands.
First,
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the need for the internet going to be a series challenge because it is necessary to be in the field of its cover. After that, the
robots
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 should have
battery
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a battery
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 for outside
work
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 at least for 10 hours.
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,
robots
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 will consume electricity for charging which will increase the bills. 
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, if people save their time with
robots
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, they will pay for them by repaying of electricity
bill
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 and routine maintenance. To summarize, modern
technology
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 that supports people should have
intelligence
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 which is artificial. The
Robots
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 are going to carry out daily
work
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 for us depending on their
intelligence
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. The
technology
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independent
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 of humans so it does not need resting time.

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task response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and refer back to it in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to improve understanding.
coherence cohesion
Check for spelling errors and ensure consistent use of terms like 'artificial intelligence' and 'robots'.
task response
You have included both advantages and disadvantages of artificial intelligence and robots, which addresses the task well.
task response
The essay provides some examples and reasons to support your points, which is good for development of ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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