Many students have to study ssubjects which they donot like. Some people think this is complete waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In the educational world, students are taught various
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considering
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level of
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education should be given to all irrespective of what
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them.
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has prompted a debate about whether to study just one subject which fascinates them or
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all leads to
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a wastage
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of their time. I disagree
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the former opinion and argue that all
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of education are equally vital for an individual's
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development.
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with, at the early stages of life, students lack
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decision-making abilities and
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, can be unsure of their
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. Adding on to it,
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develop over time and not every person knows what their passion is.
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, it may be possible that mathematics is their weakness, but the stream like engineering which involves studying physics and chemistry may
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them as a whole.
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, studying basic subjects nourishes them with a holistic approach. It evolves them with
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well rounded
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skill set needed for both personal and professional development. To illustrate, on the one hand, science and maths can help
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critical thinking and problem-solving skills,
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, social studies
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historical, geographical,
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and social knowledge.
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may argue that learning one subject which they like will increase focus and help them excel on greater levels than when they focus on several
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. It cannot be denied that
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knowledge about all should be achieved. In a nutshell, it may be argued that focusing on a single area and excelling
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, can gain personal achievements on
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, focusing
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of education together may empower them to develop a wholesome skill set and
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them
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on making your main ideas clearer and more connected to the question. Each paragraph should clearly support your position.
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Try to provide more specific examples or details to support your arguments. This will make your points stronger.
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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. This helps guide the reader through your argument.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader understand your overall opinion.
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You demonstrate an understanding of the importance of a well-rounded education.

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