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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar
chart
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 illustrates the
habbit
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habit
 of drinking
tea
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 or
coffee
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 in five cities
from
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in
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australia
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Australia
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 and
aslo
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also
 shows
their
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the
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 places
were
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where
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 they
bought
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bought it
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.
Overall
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,
people
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 choose to go to
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cafe
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cafes
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for
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to
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 drink
tea
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 or
coffee
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. Less amount of
people
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 choose to
bought
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buy
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 fresh
product
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products
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,
while
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 some
people
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 like to have
instant
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coffee
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.
Moreover
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,
highest
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the highest
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 number of sales of
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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the cafe
a cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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,
which
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apply
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is around 65% in
Malbourne
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Melbourne
.
Lowest
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The lowest
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coffe
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coffee
 or
tea
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 sales
was
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apply
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happned
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happened
 in Brisbane
for
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by
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 around 35% in
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last
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the last
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 four
week
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weeks
show examples
.
To begin
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 with,
bar
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the bar
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chart
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 shows
dramitical
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a dramitical
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 increase in sales via
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cafe
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cafes
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 for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 few weeks,
while
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 Adelaide
have
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has
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less sale
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fewer sales
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amongest
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than
 all
other
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the other
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 cities.
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Chart
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The chart
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 shows
highest
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the highest
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 number of sale via
cafe
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 in
Malbourne
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Melbourne
 and Hobart.
Although
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chart
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the chart
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 shows
reverse
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the reverse
a reverse
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 trend in Adelaide where
people
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 prefer to
brought
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bring
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instant
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coffee
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 rather than
going
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go
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 to
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cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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.
Furthermore
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,
number
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the number
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 of
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People
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people
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 who
brought
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bought
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 fresh
coffeor
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coffee
tea
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 is less than
people
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 who
choose
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chose
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cafe
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cafes
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 and
prefer
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preferred
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instant
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coffee
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.
In addition
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 population
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that choose
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choose
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chooses
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instant
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coffee
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 is almost similar in all the cities,
while
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highest
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the highest
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 in Hobart is nearly 55%.
People
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 who buy less Fresh
coffee
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 or
tea
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is
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are
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 from Brisbane.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, tea, coffee, people, cafe, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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