The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.
The line graph depicts the yearly profits of
three
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different bakeries in Calgary between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the annual earnings of Mari Bakeshop showed a decline with minor fluctuations,
while
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that of Amandine Bakery recorded an upward trend after staying constant during the first six years. Meanwhile, there were
three
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different trends in the yearly incomes of Bolo Cakery throughout the given period. In terms of Mari Bakeshop’s annual profits, the figure halved from $80,000 in 2000 to $40,000 in 2010,
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it
still
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the most profitable compared to other shops between 2000 and 2005.
By comparison
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, from 2000 to 2005, Amandine Bakery earned just under $60,000, making it the longest stable of annual earnings among the
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.
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,
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amount increased to exactly $60,000 in 2006 and
then
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continued to rise, reaching just over $100,000 in 2010.
On the other hand
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, Bolo Cakery experienced slight fluctuations in the first
three
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years, with its revenue hovering around $20,000. In 2004,
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figure rose to less than $40,000 before remaining steady until 2006. Notably, it surpassed Mari’s earnings in 2008 (at $60,000) and gradually increased
thereafter
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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