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The graph below gives information about the pnumber of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the pnumber of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides information on the predicted quantities of automobiles manufactured in four countries (China, the United
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, Japan, and the United States) throughout a fifteen-year period.
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, the data contained within the visual representation reveals that even though Japan has the lion's share in 2020, it will fall behind China in 2035, marking the latter as the largest producer among all countries.
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, the United
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 and the United
States’
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 contributions to the market will fall drastically and will be ranked third and fourth respectively. As the diagram depicts, the number of vehicles created in Japan is going to demonstrate a downward trend, reaching a trough of 100,000 by 2035 from a peak of 350,000 in 2020. Antithetical to
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 decline, China’s car production will increase marginally, rising to 150,000 only in ten years from the number that has been anticipated in 2020.
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, China’s forecasted growth will climb steadily, improving by 50,000 cars each decade to reach a high of 260,000 in 2035. The United
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 and the United States both will experience similar decline patterns. In the United
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, the production line will halve in twenty years, levelling at 100,000 in 2030 and dropping to around 50,000 in 2035. The share of American automobiles will go through a substantial low, decreasing continuously from 300,000 in 2020 to
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 around 40,000 in 2035.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated number of cars
  • significant change
  • stable/increase/decrease
  • comparative analysis
  • urban planning
  • environmental impact
  • trend
  • notable year
  • long-term implications
  • data pattern
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