Governments should spend less money on restoring old buildings and more money for new housing and roads development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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funds
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repairing and preserving old infrastructure and use
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money
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to build new
buildings
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and roads to improve
quality
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the quality
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of life of citizens and develop the nation. I agree with
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notion to some extent
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various reasons which
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will explicate in the forthcoming paragraphs. Indeed, governments should focus on building new houses and roads because
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will contribute to
development
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the development
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of the country.
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the construction of new houses, there will be a surge in
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as more people will move into the city and these newly
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houses will generate
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in the form of rent for the government, which will, ultimately result in the growth of the economy and improve quality of life of citizens.
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, a lot of funds go into restoring old
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which
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the
tax payers
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money
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, these
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are very fragile and repairing them can lead to accidents, which will
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, cost the nation,
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life.
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, there are several positive outcomes of restoring old infrastructure. Primarily,
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will preserve the country's culture and heritage
buildings
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and will foster
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knowledge.
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will
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attract tourists
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generate
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and enable
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economy to thrive on
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own. eventually,
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will widen
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cultural horizon.
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, re-construction of these will require
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, which will open new jobs for the youth.
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, there will be
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a reduction
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of unemployment in the country.
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the dint of aforementioned reasons,
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belief
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both merits and demerits.
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, I believe that governments should equally focus on restoring traditional
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as well as
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building new infrastructure to develop the state.

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