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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for supermarket.
The predicted map displays two possible sites for a
supermarket
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 in the town named Garlsdon with
population
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a population
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 of 65,000. A legend
of
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on
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 the map indicates various zones and infrastructure
such
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 as
Countryside
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the Countryside
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, Town
Centre
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 (no traffic zone), Housing, Industry, Railway and Main roads.
Overall
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, in terms of proposed spots, S2 seems to be more suitable for the construction of a new
supermarket
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 than S1.
While
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 S2 is located in
a
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the
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 town
centre
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 and near
to
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apply
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the housing, S1 is surrounded by
majorly
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major
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 countryside. Looking at the illustration, the first possible site for the
supermarket
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, S1, is just
north-west
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northwest
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 of the given area. If the
supermarket
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 is constructed here, it will be required for residents to use a railway or main roads for a huge amount of time.
However
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, for Hindon
population
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population,
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 S1 is more suitable than S2. The second site, S2 is the most appropriate and ideal location as it is well-connected to all
neighboring
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neighbouring
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 towns and located in the
centre
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 of Garlsdon.
Moreover
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, populations namely: Bransdon and Cransdon will have easier access to the shopping
centre
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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