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✍️ – Advantages and Disadvantages Essay In many countries, more and more people are choosing to live alone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

In modern days, we live in a capitalist
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 where every
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 is valued
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 what they have achieved personally,
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, a lot of people have turned to
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 by themselves away from their families, and
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 it has some advantages like freedom, it
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 has some disadvantages that we are going to discuss. First of all, living by yourself can be different from
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 to
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, but if we are taking the United States of America
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, living alone offers you the ability to have complete control over your life and schedule and
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 can be very beneficial in your career and in your personal life, as you won’t need to worry about family gatherings or a movie night.
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, one of the biggest advantages of living alone is that you can manage your diet without worrying about not being able to track calories from the family food,
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, it can
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 to go to the gym regularly and focus on improving your health.
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, living alone has some disadvantages like boredom ,
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 it can be helpful in some cases, having too much free
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 can be harmful as it gives the
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 room and
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 to make some decisions that would give him
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short-term happiness but a long-term addiction, like drugs or tobacco.
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, when living alone in a different
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, some people might struggle with
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 zones because it makes communicating with your family members harder than it is if you are living in the same
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. In conclusion,
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 it is not easy to make
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 a pivotal decision, you should always consult your family and close friends, and review the advantages and disadvantages because in situations like
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 no right or wrong decisions, it varies from
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 to
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 and from
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 to
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly outline both sides of the argument in separate paragraphs. This will make your points clearer.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your points. This will help readers understand your ideas better.
task achievement
You introduced the topic well and stated both advantages and disadvantages clearly.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear structure in your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • self-discovery
  • self-reliance
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • economic implications
  • financial strain
  • individualism
  • cultural shifts
  • traditional family structures
  • housing demand
  • urban development
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