The chart shows how frequently people in the ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart shows how frequently people in the ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows how frequently people in the ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the frequency of eating junk
food
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at fast
food
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restaurants among individuals in the United States in different three years 2003, 2006 and 2013.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that people tend to eat fast
food
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frequently the most were Once A week and Once or twice a month,
while
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the percentages of people who ate every day or never were the lowest.
In addition
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, the trends show initial
grew
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but
eventually
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they dropped.
According to
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the data, the percentage of
peoplewho
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people who
never ate fast
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in all three years was less than 5%.
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those who consumed several times a week in 2003, 2006 and 2013 were nearly 17%, 20% and 16% respectively.Those who ate once or twice a week were just above 30% in 2003 and 2006,
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in 2013 they were almost 27%. In terms of once or twice a month, 30% was recorded in 2003, 25% in 2006 and approximately 33% in 2013. The proportion of consumers who ate a few times a year was nearly 13% and 15% in both 2006 and 2013.
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, in 2003
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accounted
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5% of people who never visited fat restaurants, and just 5% and almost 4% in 2006 and 2013.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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