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Experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primeray schools rather that secondary school the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

there is no denying the fact that learning
new
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language
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 is
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 of the most crucial
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 nowadays .
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 it is a commonly held belief that starting to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 should be at
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primeray
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primary
schools
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, there is
also
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 an argument that
new
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a new
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language
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 is not
one
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 of the things that children should learn
it
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at
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 in
yungest
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youngest
younger
 age and it can be at secondary
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. in
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i
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 will
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analyse
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 topic from both
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 of view and express my opinion. on
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 hand, certain advantages of acquiring a new
language
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 at
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primeray
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primary
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. in
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, learning different
languges
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languages
 may assist the
childrens
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children
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 to achieve their
ambitition
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ambition
ambitions
 in future because learning in childhood is like engraving on stone.
in addition
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, new studies confirm that students can learn
foreign
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language
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 when they are
in
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 the
beging
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beginning
 of their
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 life better than when they
become
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 in secondary
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.
for example
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, international
schools
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 start to educate students
different
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in different
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language
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languages
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 from grade
one
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 so they can
comunicate
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communicate
 eseially with native
speekers
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speakers
 and get their success in
there
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 lives when they become
a university students
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.
on the other hand
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, some individuals believe that the right age for teaching
childerns
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children
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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languages
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 is not when they are in
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primeray
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primary
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.it is possible to say that,the load on children will be more than what it should be.
moreover
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, it will affect
there
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 native
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 and they will face
difeculty
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difficulty
 in
there
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their
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 communication skills with others. in conclusion, there
is
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 no easy answers to
this
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 question. on balance,
however
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,
i
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 tend to believe that as globalization has increased, learning
foriegn
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foreign
 international
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language
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languages
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 has become
requirement
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a requirement
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 in many fields which
make
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 the advantages of learning languages in
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primeray
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primary
schools
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 more than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.

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task achievement
Make sure each part of your essay clearly supports your opinion or argument. You need to have clear points that relate back to your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your paragraphs focused on one idea each. This will help make your writing clearer and easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple and correct spelling for words. This will help others read your writing without confusion.
task achievement
You have a clear position on the topic, which is very important in an IELTS essay.
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You included some examples to support your points, which is a good practice.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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