Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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sport
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activities has influenced how
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perceive
success through resilience and
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. Some
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people
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strength
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and
power
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of the most crucial
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in
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doing
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,
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another group
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emotional
strength
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This
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about
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both
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and give
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point
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points
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of view towards the issue.
The physical
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power
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is something that very
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in shaping
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people
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sport
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results. One of the
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of having strong
power
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is
people
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achieve
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sport result
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more
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and faster than
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others.
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,
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who have more
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in cardio activities could burn
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calories more and run faster.
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,
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people
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with low
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is impossible to achieve that.
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applicable in
strength
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training,
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gym,
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hyrax
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,
crossfit
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CrossFit
, and
other
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others
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.
People
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who possess more
power
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could perform more rather than
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who
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less
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and capability.
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,
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physical agility could be trained as long as
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people
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want to
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exercise more.
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, some
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argue that emotional
strength
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is more contribute to
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people
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success in doing
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,
people
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who challenge theirself to run with
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the certain
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target or believe they can hold
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weight might
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exceeds
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the target. The concept of
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in
self
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that
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could
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achieve certain
target
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targets
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and
challenge
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give
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power
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the power
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to be more
resilience
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and
endurance
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while
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doing some
sport
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in order to
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achieve
great performance. Personally, from my point of view,
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think both physical
power
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and mental capability complement
to
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each other and
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accountability for our
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sport
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performance and outcomes as both of them could be maintained through regular and
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exercise.
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, for me, emotional capabilities
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the long-term impact of physical
strength
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that trained regularly a

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coherence and cohesion
Review your introduction; it needs to clearly outline the main points of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include a clear conclusion that summarizes your main ideas.
task achievement
Try to use more specific examples to support your points, as this strengthens your argument.
content
You show a good understanding of both physical and mental strength in sports.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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