The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of three different ways of asking in a singular metropolis over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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, receiving a question from a person was the most popular one, and it
also
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increased its dominance
at the end
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of the period. Followed slightly by paper letters and online messages,
while
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using a telephone has decreased. Upon initial observation, we will observe that at the beginning of the year, questioning the Tourist Office by telephone was the most common way, comprising 900. Followed by email and paper letters, with 800. Meanwhile, asking physically was the least popular one, with 450. Turning to the second side of the graph, it can be seen that questioning by a human experienced a dramatic rise to 1900, in June, making it reach its peak. Followed by using telephones which rose modestly, to 1600,
while
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emails and letters saw a dramatic decline, falling to 390.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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