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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that goverments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely believed that
university
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education
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 should be made
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cost free
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 by the government for all people regardless of their financial condition .
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 ,many people condemn that it is
common
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 right to get career
building
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career-building
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education
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 ,I strongly agree that it is pivotal for all
students
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 as it does not only reduce family's extra financial burden but
also
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provide
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 freedom to build their career in areas of interest.
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 with ,one major reason why I favour free college
education
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 is that it allows parents to send their children to complete their graduation or
post -graduation
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post-graduation
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 without having
worry
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to worry
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of
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about
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cost
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 .
This
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 will
helps
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 parents
as well as
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student
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students
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 to avoid extra
expense
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expenses
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 and keep their savings for
long
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a long
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 time .
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, countries like India where many institutions
such
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 as IIAM and IIT charge high amount of fees to get admission at their colleges .
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it is clear that
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cost free
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 programs will not only urge
students
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 to enroll
in
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apply
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but
also
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 lessen the worry of family's financial pressure . Another major reason is that free
university
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 programs construct
developed
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the developed
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 and
thrived
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thriving
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 economy of that country .
By providing
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Providing
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 free
education
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 at
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university
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the university
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 level
given
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the
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apply
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rise
of
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to
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 a situation where more
students
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 enrolled and
complete
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completed
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 their certification
education
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 with
best
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the best
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 performance.
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 ,
students
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 will willingly choose their subjects of interest and
performed
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 exceptionally in
it
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them
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.
As a result
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 ,creating
wider
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a wider
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 literacy rate and
thriving
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a thriving
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 job market will help to reduce
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate . In conclusion ,I strongly opine that
university
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education
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 should be made free of
cost
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 who are in need of it ,as it helps to lessen excessive financial burden for
family
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families
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 and creates
developed
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a developed
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 economy .

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences to help readers follow your main points
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Support your ideas with more detailed examples and explanations
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points clearly
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You express a clear opinion on the topic, showing your agreement.
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You present relevant reasons for your position, like financial burden and economic benefits.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equitable access
  • Socio-economic status
  • Economic growth
  • Skilled workforce
  • Student debt
  • Social mobility
  • Cycle of poverty
  • Financial burdens
  • Education quality
  • Public services
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