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It has been argued that not every possible household waste is getting recycled and there in only way to improve it if government makes some strict regulations in it. while some people believe that without a legislation it can be manage. I agree with the statement to a large extent.

It has been argued that an insufficient amount of
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waste
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 is getting recycled from houses; some
people
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 believe that the government should implement some strict regulations to mitigate
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 issue.
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 others think that without legislation it can be managed by spreading awareness among residents. I agree with the statement to a large extent. The foremost argument to support
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 view is that increasing recycling of unwanted materials can create a more environmentally friendly world.
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, in many countries like
Canada
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 there are laws to separate plastic and organic garbage from the other
waste
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; so, plastic can be recycled properly and biodegradable stuff can be used as bio-fertilizer.
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,
by
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making
law
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in
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this
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can make
people
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 more serious about the global pollution issue.
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, laws have a major impact
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 daily life. Most
people
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 do not follow it until they are required to.
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, citizens can find it inconvenient and
time- consuming
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.
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 why legal punishments or warnings are required.
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, in
Japan
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Japan,
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 if a person does not comply with the
waste
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 management regulation they can be warned or required to pay a fine.
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contrary
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 some
people
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counter claim
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 the mentioned support, the argument they
do
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 is there is no need to make regulations in
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 because
people
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 can do it voluntarily.
Secondly
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,
campaign
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campaigns
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 and public awareness
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through
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 advertisements are enough to
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reduce
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 unwanted
waste
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.
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this
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although
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 recycling through education has
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its
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 own advocates, I maintain that it should
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 under government control
due to
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 what everyone follows it.

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Make sure to develop your ideas further and use clear examples to explain them well.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer organization by linking each paragraph more effectively to the main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammar mistakes and improve sentence structure for more clarity.
task achievement
You have a clear position on the topic and provide some reasonable arguments.
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You include examples, which is important for supporting your points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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