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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table compares the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in four countries —
Australia
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, New
Zealand
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, the United Kingdom, and the United States — in 2003 and 2006,
as well as
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 the
number
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 of
such
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workers
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 per 1,000 people in 2006.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 increased in all four countries over the three-year period. Despite the United States having the highest total
number
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 of migrant
workers
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, New
Zealand
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 had the greatest proportion per 1,000 people in 2006. In 2003, the United States had by far the largest
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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, at 577,000.
This
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 figure rose to 678,000 by 2006. The UK
also
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 experienced a significant increase, with the
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 almost doubling from 137,000 to 266,000. Meanwhile,
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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also
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 showed upward trends. The
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 in
Australia
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 grew from 152,000 to 219,000,
whereas
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 in New
Zealand
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 the figures rose more modestly, from 65,000 to 87,000.
However
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, when looking at the
number
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 of migrant
workers
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 per 1,000 people in 2006, New
Zealand
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 had the highest ratio, at 21.1.
Australia
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 followed with 10.7,
while
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 the UK and the US had relatively low proportions, at 4.4 and 2.3 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, australia, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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