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Band 2

Nowsadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. This has negative effects on themselves and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

There is no denying the fact that young people spend too much of their free time in shopping
malls
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 it is a commonly held belief
This
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 has negative effects on themselves and the society they live in, there is
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 an
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argument
 that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that I disagree with it.
To begin
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 with,the youths are more
enegetic
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energetic
.
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,they have
alot
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a lot
 of powers .
In addition
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,they could
creat
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create
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 new
relation ships
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relationships
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.
For example
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,
the
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a
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 student
in
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at
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 Kuwait
university
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 figured out
the
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 more you go to
malls
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, the more you have social relations" by research. Another point
consider
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,
the
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 impact of going to
malls
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to
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on
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 having
good
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 mood.
It
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also
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 possible to say that going to
cinema
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the cinema
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 could improve our skills in communication.
Moreover
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, we could increase our
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society
.
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, the youths could level up the sales in shops. In conclusion,
dispite
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despite
 people
haveing
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having
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 different views, I believe that going to
malls
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 is
crcials
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crucial
to
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for
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 young people,
becouse
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because
 it has
alot
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a lot
 of achevements
prograss
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progress
.

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it well.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas, like 'firstly', 'however', and 'for example'.
task achievement
Try to give more specific examples to support your points.
content
You present your opinion clearly in the introduction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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