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People from cities go to university more often than those who live in the country. Some people think that the government should make it easier to enter universities for people who live outside the cities and towns by setting lower entry requirements and tuition fees. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Some people prefer friends who always agree with them,
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 others think disagreement is more useful. In my opinion, both types of friendships have value, but I believe disagreement can lead to personal growth. When friends disagree, they ask questions and give reasons for their opinions.
This
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 helps us think more deeply and improve our communication.
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, someone who often debates with others may become more confident and better at solving problems.
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, friends who agree with us and offer support can
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 make us feel happy and motivated. These relationships are comfortable and help us enjoy life more,
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 as by
traveling
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 together or sharing hobbies. In conclusion,
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 agreement is comforting, I believe that disagreement can improve our thinking and make friendships stronger.

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task achievement
Make sure all your main points are fully explained and supported by examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use phrases or words to connect your ideas better, like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
positive
Your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic.
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You provide a good balance of points for both sides of the argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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