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The pie chart below show the rebenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below show the rebenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the income generated by five businesses in Togo in 2000 and their expected revenue in 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the earnings of some of the industries will remain consistent in the future
whereas
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 other firms will experience a significant fluctuation in the profits. In 2000, the companies producing soft beverages and the agencies that provide services earned
equivalent
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 amount of money which was 25
billion
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dollars
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.
Similarly
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 in 2050, the revenue of the former firm remained
same
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the same
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 but the latter agency is expected to experience a loss of 15
billion
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dollars
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.
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, real estate development companies acquired 20
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000,
this
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 figure will rise by 5
billion
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 in the future.
Moreover
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, the organisations dealing with life insurance got 12
billion
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dollars
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 from their operations as per the first demonstration.
In contrast
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,
this
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 industry will
underwent
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 a gradual decline in
the
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apply
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revenue by 2
billion
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dollars
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 in the upcoming years.
On the other hand
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,
semiconductor
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the semiconductor
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 industry will undergo a dramatic increase in the level of their earning from 15
billion
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 in 2000 to 126
billion
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 in 2050, leading to a great contribution to the national income.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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