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The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000. Measured in tonnes.

The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000. Measured in tonnes.
The line graph illustrates the
production
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 of fossil fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the highest
production
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 was Petroleum for 20 years,
while
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 coal and natural
gas
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 were the two fuels with lower
production
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 levels. Petroleum had been produced at stable and high levels in the session. From 1981, it began at the
level
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 of 100m
tonnes
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, followed by a sharp increase of 30m
tonnes
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. After that, the
level
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 fluctuated between 130m to 100m
tonnes
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, ending up with 120m
tonnes
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. As for coal and natural
gas
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, their
level
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 was less than Petroleum in the time slot, with the opposite trend between these two fuels. There were 80m
tonnes
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 of coal manufactured at the beginning, which was two times more than natural
gas
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.
However
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, the
tonnes
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 of coal experienced a sharp decline to 50m
tonnes
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, with a slight increase to 60m. Following a decreasing trend, the
level
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 still kept declining to near 40m
tonnes
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. As for natural
gas
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, the
production
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 amount climbed up in 1995 at the same
level
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 as coal.
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, it had a dramatic growth to nearly 90m, which was nearly 50m
tonnes
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 more than coal.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, gas, level, m, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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