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The table below shows the percentage of people using five different modes of transport to commute to work in three cities in 2010.

The table below shows the percentage of people using five different modes of transport to commute to work in three cities in 2010.
The table compares the proportion of people using five different modes of transport to commute in
London
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,
Sydney
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, and
Bangkok
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, cars were the most popular transport method in all three cities, especially in
Bangkok
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,
while
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 trains and buses were more common in
London
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. Walking and cycling remained minor but present in all cities. In
London
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, car usage stood at 35%, which was lower than in
Sydney
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 (50%) and
Bangkok
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 (60%).
London
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 had the highest proportion of bus users at 25% and train users at 20%.
In contrast
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,
Bangkok
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 had minimal train use (5%) and relatively low bus use (15%). Cycling was more popular in
Sydney
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 (15%) than in the other two cities (both 10%). Walking remained constant in
London
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 and
Bangkok
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 at 10%, but was lowest in
Sydney
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 at just 5%. The figures suggest that
London
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 relied more on public transport,
while
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Bangkok
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 was more car-dependent.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sydney, bangkok with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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