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Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no denying the best way to motivate and encourage
peaople
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people
 to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell,
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 it is held belief that
people
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 do not need
pay
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 to encourage them. To
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 with, encourage by paying is a fine idea.
In addition
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, it supports them to move on on
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 work.
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, some employees focus on the target
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 as, when the
manger
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manager
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put
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 a target monthly for them and the reward is very good.
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, the employees will care for their produce
whe
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when
 they have a target. Another point to consider is that
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 the
people
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 is
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 idea because sometimes the company do not have enough money to motivate the
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.
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,
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 the employee makes
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 hard to recognise the loyal employee. In conclusion, despite
people
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have
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 different views. I believe that support and give  great lecture and improving the employee is more essential
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then
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than
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give
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 them motivation.

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task achievement
Make sure to write a clear introduction that states your main opinion clearly.
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Use clear examples to support your points and make them stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas in a clear order for better flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar for mistakes to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You addressed the topic and presented an opinion, which is a good start.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • motivate
  • encourage
  • productivity
  • performance-based pay
  • objective assessment
  • collaboration
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • stress
  • burnout
  • job satisfaction
  • compensation strategy
  • quantify
  • supportive work environment
  • professional development
  • recognition programs
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