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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of
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burglary
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burglaries
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,
car
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theft
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, and robbery crime in the centre of Manchester between 2003 and 2012.
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, it is evident that
burglary
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 decreased over the period,
car
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theft
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 showed a general upward trend, and robbery remained relatively stable.
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,
burglary
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 was the most common crime between 2003 and 2006,
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car
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theft
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 was the most prevalent by the end of the period. Looking at the details, there were approximately 3500
burglary
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cases
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 in 2003, which increased to about 3750
cases
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 in 2004.
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,
this
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 figure dropped significantly, reaching a low of 1000
cases
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 in 2008. In the subsequent years, the
number
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 of burglaries rose and remained relatively stable until 2012. Regarding
car
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theft
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,
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number
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 was lower than
burglary
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. It fluctuated until 2008 and hit its lowest point in 2006, at around 2000
cases
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. In the subsequent years,
this
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 figure experienced an increase to 2.800
cases
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, making it the most common case by the end of the period. Robbery started the least frequent crime, with only 500
cases
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 in 2003.
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number
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 doubled in 2005 but
then
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 decreased with the same figure as in 2003. The
number
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 of robberies remained relatively stable until the final years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, burglary, car, theft, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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