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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the changes in the
number
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 of
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burglary
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burglaries
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,
car
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theft
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, and
robbery
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 incidents in the centre of Manchester between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, it is evident that
burglary
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cases
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 declined over the period,
car
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theft
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 showed a general upward trend, and
robbery
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 remained relatively stable.
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,
burglary
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 was the most common
crime
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 from 2003 to 2006,
whereas
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car
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theft
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 became the most prevalent by the end of the period. Looking at the details, there were approximately 3,500
burglary
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cases
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 in 2003, which increased slightly to about 3,750 in 2004.
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,
this
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 figure dropped significantly, reaching a low of 1,000
cases
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 in 2008. In the following year, the
number
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 of burglaries rose and
then
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 remained relatively stable at around 1,500
cases
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 until 2012. Regarding
car
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theft
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, the
number
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 of incidents in 2003 was lower than
burglary
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, at around 2,300
cases
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.
This
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 figure fluctuated until 2008 and hit its lowest point in 2006, at 2,000
cases
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. In the subsequent years, the
number
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 of
car
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 thefts showed a rising trend, reaching 2,800
cases
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 in 2012, making it the most common
crime
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 by the end of the period.
Robbery
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 started as the least frequent
crime
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, with only 500
cases
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 in 2003.
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number
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 doubled over the next two years but
then
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 declined in 2006 to the same level as in 2003. From 2006 onwards,
robbery
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cases
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 remained relatively stable, consistently being the lowest among the three types of
crime
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, burglary, car, theft, robbery, cases, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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