some people think that the internet is making people less social. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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believe that the
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is making
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people
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more and more isolated from each other.I agree to some extent with
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think it depends on how
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use the
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with, the
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can reduce real social interactions.
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, some
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spend many hours
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social media
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of meeting their
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in real life.
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,
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habit can lead to
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lonely or even
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.It is clear
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that thet
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the
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can take time away from
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communication.
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,
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internet
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also
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maybe some time will be helpful for
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to stay
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connected.
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, video calls and online groups make it more and more
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easier
to talk to your family or meet new
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from different countries.
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, many shy
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feel comfortable to take online.
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, the
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can
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support social life in new ways.
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,
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sometimes
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reduces
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meetings
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,
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believe it can
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make social life easier and more open if used correctly.

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task achievement
Make sure to give clear examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your paragraphs. Each one should clearly connect to the main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use correct spelling and grammar to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is a strong point in your essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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