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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how much money was spent on purchasing books in
Germany
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, France, Italy, and Austria over a ten-year
period
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 from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, all four countries saw an increase in
book
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 expenditure over the
period
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, with
Germany
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 and France ending as the highest spenders.
While
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Germany
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 and France showed steady growth, Italy’s figures remained relatively unchanged, and Austria, despite starting with the lowest figures, experienced the most rapid growth.
Germany
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 consistently recorded the highest
book
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 expenditure throughout the
period
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. Spending increased from $80
million
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 in 1995 to $90
million
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 in 1999, experienced a slight dip to $71
million
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 by 2003, and
then
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 peaked at approximately $93
million
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 in 2005. France’s
book
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 spending increased steadily year on year, rising from approximately $55
million
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 in 1995 to nearly $75
million
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 by 2005. Italy’s spending on books fluctuated moderately during the
period
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, falling from a peak of around $55
million
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 in 1997 to about $50
million
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 in 1999, before recovering slightly and ending just below $60
million
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 in 2005. Austria started with the lowest
book
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 spending, at around $30
million
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 in 1995.
Although
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 the figures remained relatively flat until 2001, they
then
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 rose sharply, reaching approximately $70
million
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 by 2005 and surpassing Italy.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, period, book, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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