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The graph below shows the per capita consumption of whole milk and low-fat milk in the United States between 1970 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the per capita consumption of whole milk and low-fat milk in the United States between 1970 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph presents the per capita consumption of both low-fat
milk
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 and whole
milk
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 in the US, between 1970 and 2015. Starting with the whole
milk
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 consumption. It is recognizable that it decreased extremely from 25 per person - in
gallons
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 - in the
last
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 quarter of the 20th century, to only 14 in
the
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1990. And
this
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 decrease process didn't stop and kept
in
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falling until 2010 to 6
gallons
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 per capita. And for the low-fat
milk
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. It increased from 7
gallons
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 in
year
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the year
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 1970 to 14 in the latest years of the 20th century. and it started to stay steady from 2000 until 2010. But there was a very small drop
after
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this
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 rose and stable periods, and went to number 12 or 13
gallons
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 from the low-fat
milk
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 consumption.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, gallons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • preference
  • significant
  • decline
  • rise
  • trend
  • gradual
  • surpass
  • pattern
  • shift
  • healthier options
  • approximately
  • amount
  • between
  • overall
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