Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on completely different factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is subjective and can vary from
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individual to another. Keeping
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notion we can argue that economic stability can be
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of the key factors but we can considerably have more. When looking at
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happiness
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we can agree that good economic status does bring a variety of accessibilities and luxuries that are directly linked to
happiness
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for eg. Having a spacious house and a comfortable living space can give you the
satsifaction
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satisfaction
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might need to feel content.
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, excelling in your career can boost your
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giving a purpose to
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.
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, when we are able to afford the necessities of
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it is easier for
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one
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to focus on other aspects of
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that the individual can employ
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in i.e maybe joining a pottery class,
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or dance class or any other
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extracurricular
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curricular that can boost its
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with
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.
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, when we look at the other
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of
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and satisfaction, monetary success is not the only thing necessary for
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. Family, personal relationships and friends hold a highly valued place in a human's
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to give meaning and depth to
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's identity. The role of having a purpose and a sense of belonging goes far more than any other factor. In order
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it can be said that
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financial
stability is
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factor to a successful
life
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but having meaningful connections is the
eptiome
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epitome
of
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and
happiness
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in
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.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that links back to the topic.
task achievement
You show a good understanding of the topic and present both views clearly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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