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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There is no denying the fact that travel and work in a foreign country develop our languages and many other
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. In my opinion, I consider that the person who wants to learn anything not only language by practice, make some steps , and to-do list for every day. Now I will discuss both views and
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 I will talk about my opinion.
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 with , the person who always travels.
In other words
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, he meets
people
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 from different countries and cultures. It leads, to improving his speaking , communication
skills
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 , and listening. To elaborate, I see
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 is the important thing to learning any language , we call it inputs . If we use these inputs in the correct way , We will see the result quickly.
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, a person who learns language by himself, by YouTube or by watching movies. The listening was good but my other
skills
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 were not very well.
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,
people
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 who play video games and talk with others via Twitch or Discord conversations of them was very nice.
To sum up
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, despite
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 having different views , I believe that everything you want to learn or improve any
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 can
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by taking time and doing your best . No differences between
people
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 who learn it and how I can achieve it and arrive at my goals.

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You introduce both sides of the argument well.
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Your conclusion summarizes the main points effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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