Many working people get little or no exerciseeither during the working dayorin their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examplesfrom your own knowledge or experience

In
this
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contemporary era,
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who work
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it difficult to manage
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for physical
activities
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even when they are free,
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, they experience detrimental
health
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issues. There are a number of reasons
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as busy schedules that
hinders
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hinder
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a person's ability to
excercise
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exercise
,
however
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, there are multifaceted strategies that can help
people
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overcome
health
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problems by managing their
time
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for
excercises
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exercise
, which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the lives of
people
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have
became
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so hectic that they have a list of
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and chores that they have to do on weekends. Most of the families have working men and women who
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long hours and meet each other at dinner. There are many responsibilities
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as cooking, cleaning, laundry and groceries that employed
people
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do during their leisure
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.
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,
people
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prefer to spend quality
time
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with their family whenever they are free.
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household chores and obligations
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so much
time
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that
people
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often deny engaging in physical
activities
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which
cause
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causes
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problems
such
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as obesity, high blood pressure and cardiovascular diseases.
On the other hand
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, there are several approaches that working
people
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can opt to reduce the chances of
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health related
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health-related
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problems and to engage in physical
workout
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.
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,
people
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should prefer
activities
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that involve physical movements
such
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as camping when they go
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vacation with their family.
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enables them to spend
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with their loved ones
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doing physical activity.
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, for getting
grocery
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groceries
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,
instead
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of travelling
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cars and other vehicles for short distances,
people
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can
chose
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to cover the length by walking which will help them in physical movements.
To conclude
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, though allocating
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for
health
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is difficult because of other obligations
but
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people
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can bring changes by selecting
activities
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that provide
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benefits
along with
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enjoyment .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • physical activity
  • health problems
  • exercise routine
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • sedentary jobs
  • sedentary behavior
  • long working hours
  • lack of time
  • lack of motivation
  • inadequate facilities
  • stress and fatigue
  • lack of awareness
  • social pressure
  • access to parks
  • recreational areas
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