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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
the provided figure
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illustrates
 the variation
the
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numbers
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number
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 of
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salaries
 of
teachers
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 in secondary and high schools enrolled in 2009 in different places in the world. in the
first
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 the
luxembourg
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Luxembourg
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 was
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rise
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salaers
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salters
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then
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than
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other country
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. it was when
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the commence
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commence
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salary
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80.000
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then
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 after 15
years
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go
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 up
119.000
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.
overall
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 it is evident that considering the lowest
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 in being it was
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australia
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Australia
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.
therefore
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australia
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Australian
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teachers
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teachers'
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salary
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increase
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 after 15
years
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wil
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will
 be 48.000 per year.
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moreover
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 the
korea emplyee
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Korean employee
salary
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 in
commence
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was 30.000 per year.
according to
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 what
shown
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is shown
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 in the table
the
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in the maximum the significant lowest country teacher
salary
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it
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was
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australia
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Australia
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.the important points in the table the
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australia
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Australian
salaeris
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salary has
 grown rapidly in
a
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fewer
years
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 it was 9
years
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salary
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increase
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 was 48.000.hance the
australia
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 was very
rise
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 country to
increase
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salary
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.
in
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 the other
point
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denmark
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teachers
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teachers'
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salary
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rise
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slowely
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slowly
.
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while japan
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In Japan
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 the
teachers
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slowley
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slowly
 increased
in
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their
salary
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 was in commence 34.000
then
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increase
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 after 37
years
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86.000
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to 86.000
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.
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while
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In Denmark
denmark
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teachers
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they
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spend 8
years
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 to get 54.000 per
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years
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year
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it
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 was
very
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the very
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 fast duration
in contrast
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 the
luxembroug
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Luxembourg
teachers
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has
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 the highest
salary
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 in being was 80.000
then
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 will be in the maximum 132.000.the significantly higher
salary
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 in the table indicates was in first
luxembroug
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Luxembourg
then
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 japan.
however
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 the very fast
years
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 to
rise
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 the
salary
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 it was in first
denmark
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then
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austrlia
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Australia

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, rise, salary, years, australia, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • salary
  • teacher
  • school
  • education
  • degree
  • high school
  • bachelor
  • master
  • urban
  • rural
  • region
  • differences
  • earn
  • experience
  • increase
  • cost of living
  • data
  • present
  • compare
  • highlight
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