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You met with an accident that damaged your car .you left the car at garage for repair but you are not happy with the car repair.write a letter to garage owner for the same. In your Letter Introduce yourself Describe what happened Say what you want the garage to fix now

Dear Mr. Singh, I am writing
this
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 letter to express dissatisfaction about the service that I got from your team. I am Rupinder Kaur. I visited your store
last
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 month. I had an accident on 22nd May which damaged my
car
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. One of my
sugested
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suggested
 me you and I
parked
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park
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 my
car
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 at your garage for
repairing
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repairs
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. There were some scratches on the
car
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 that
was
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were
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 visible. The
color
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colour
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 of my
car
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 was plain black. You painted the right side of
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car
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the car
a car
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 with
star
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a star
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 in black which made the side
looks
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look
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differecnt
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different
. I told you to replace the bumper but you only repaired it. I
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was tottaly
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tottaly diappointed
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totally disappointed
 with the service. I want from you that
your
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you
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 should fix the problems
with
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in
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 no time. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur.

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grammar
Please check your spelling and grammar for errors, like 'suggested' instead of 'sugeted' and 'totally' instead of 'tottaly'.
structure
Try to structure your letter with clear paragraphs, one for your introduction, one for describing the issue, and one for stating what you want. This will help the reader follow your ideas easily.
tone
Make sure your closing statement is more polite, like 'I appreciate your attention to this matter.' instead of 'I am looking forward to your positive consideration.'
clarity
You clearly stated the problem you faced with your car and your expectations, which is good for a complaint letter.
format
Your letter follows a polite structure with a greeting and closing, which is appropriate for correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accident
  • garage
  • repair
  • car
  • customer
  • satisfied
  • issues
  • work
  • quality
  • resolve
  • damage
  • re-evaluation
  • request
  • expect
  • fix
  • thorough
  • relationship
  • date
  • happened
  • parts
  • specific
  • second
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