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Some people think that it is a good idea of all employees to wear a uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 do agree.
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 believe the employees should wear uniform in
there
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their
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 jobs so people or
custemrs
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customers
knows
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know
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 who talking with them if someone
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needs
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 help in the supermarket with
there
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their
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 grosery, but the uniforms
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must
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 be confortiable and decentK
due to
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 let the
empolyees
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employees
 feel
sife
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safe
 in good and healthy enviermenet.
to sum up
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, it is good thought the
empolyees
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employees
 wear a uniform at
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apply
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work.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and summarize in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer connections between your ideas, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
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Provide more details and examples to support your points. For instance, explain how uniforms help customers identify employees.
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You have clearly stated your opinion on the issue, which is good.
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You mentioned the comfort of uniforms and the safety of employees, which are important points.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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