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Band 4

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to wor for a company or organistaion. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

In recent times, there
is
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has been
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 a noticeable trend showing some people prefer to work
by
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on
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own
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their own
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 rather than work for any employers.It has
may
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many
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 reasons why people to self-employed.There might be some drawbacks
of
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to
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 being self-employed. There are several reasons why
Linking Words
this
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these
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 cases are coming.
Firstly
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,being
a
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apply
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self-employed people can work with flexible schedules and more family
times
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time
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain your ideas and give specific examples that support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each main idea to help the reader follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and sentence structure so your writing is easier to read.
task achievement
You introduced a relevant topic that many people find interesting.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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