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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the next few
years
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 there is a possibility that
people
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 will not afford any printed newspapers or
books
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 since online
media
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 nowadays provides
many
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apply
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updated
information
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 which
people
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 can read without buying it. In my opinion, I agree because there are plenty
modern
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of modern
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 free
platform
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platforms
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 and the accessibilities
of
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to
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 reading news or
books
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 online
are
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is
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 widely open nowadays.
Firstly
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, in
this
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 Internet of Things (
IOT
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IoT
) era, all
of
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digital
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the digital
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media
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 are more advanced, providing
many
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much
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 reliable
information
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 and e-
books
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 for readers. Those who are
fund
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found
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 to reading and literacy experience the easier way to read
that
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apply
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they just need to type
on
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in
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search
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a search
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 engine and the result will appear in seconds.
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, Tempo.co, a well-known online news
media
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in indonesia
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indonesia
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, gives
an up-to-date
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up-to-date information
a piece of up-to-date information
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information
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 using two languages (Indonesian and English) and is available in
the
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other social
media
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such
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 as Instagram and WhatsApp Channel. Since the method
in
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of
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 acquiring
information
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 is so much easier nowadays,
public
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the public
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obtain
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obtains
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 the advantages of reading freely in an online way. In
term
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terms
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 of accessibility, online
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
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 are accessible anywhere and anytime.
Information
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 and insights come from digital
media
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and is
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is
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are
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 readable for all readers once they need to read
information
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 without waiting for
newspaper
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a newspaper
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 or
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books
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book
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 seller first.
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,
comparing
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compared
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 to
books
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 with more than 600 pages
and
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that
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 need to
buy
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be
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 it from
the
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an
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 offline store, Apple
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 has facilities to buy and read
books
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 with its application so that
people
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 will not hold a heavy book
for
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apply
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them
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apply
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to read with so much more affordable price.
This
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 benefit widely
open
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opens
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 the doors for
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books
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book
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 lovers to In conclusion, in
this
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 period of time
which
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when
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 technology become more advanced,
people
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 will not be interested in printed
media
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 or physical
books
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.
Public
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The Public
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 now is exposed
with
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to
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 a number of modern
media
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 consisting of online newspapers and e-
books
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 that allow them to access
it
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them
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 easily.

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task achievement
Work on providing clearer and more detailed points to support your argument in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow by using transitional phrases between ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to follow standard grammar rules and check your spelling before submitting your work.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for task response.
task achievement
Your examples support your ideas and relate well to the discussion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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