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It is more important for a building to be functional than beautiful. Architects should not worry about designing buildings as works of art. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that buildings are part of the culture of the countries.
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 it is a commonly held belief that buildings should have a special design that focuses on functional parts, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that when architects worry about how they design the building that will develop the country faster and create more opportunities for jobs.
to begin
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 with, the architect is an important part of the enhance the economy of the country.
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, he or she can improve the cities by building interesting shapes in one city and someone shared that on TikTok, there are a lot of families
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who will
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 come to
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 city just to see
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 place. So,
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 is one of the ways to have more tourists, push the workers to come to beautiful work areas and enhance the economy. Another point to consider, there will be a challenge for engineering to build wonderful areas and
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 area will have more activities and humans. So, people can have a better life and work in their homes.
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, when the buildings have both interesting activities and shapes, people are curious and they will come to visit and some of them may have a job there. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that if the government supports the architects to build more beautiful places that will be great for both the country and the architect.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
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Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to help guide the reader.
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Provide examples that directly support your main points more clearly.
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Try to create a stronger connection between the ideas in your paragraphs to improve flow.
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You provided your personal opinion on the topic, which is important for the task.
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You included examples, showing some evidence of your arguments.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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