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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the total transformation of the central library over 20 years. It has been modernised totally and areas like
reading
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the reading
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room
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, adult non-fiction books,
the
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and the
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 centre with tables and chairs have been completely demolished and
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instead
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instead,
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 areas
such
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 as an information desk, self-service machines and a cafe have been introduced to it. Only, the entrance remains
at
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in
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 its place. At the
south-east
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southeast
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corner
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, the enquiry desk has been completely knocked off and
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instead
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instead,
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 a cafe has been built there. On the opposite of it, the computer
room
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 has been shifted from the north-west
corner
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 to south-west now.
Children's
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The children's
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 books area which used to be
at
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in
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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 has been remodelled and shifted to the
north-west
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northwest
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corner
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 of the library,
also
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 adding new sofas plus a section for storytelling events. Just when you come out of
this
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room
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, you will see that
adult
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the adult
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 fiction area has now been replaced by the all reference books section and the former has been shifted
in-front
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in front
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 of the newly added lecture
room
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 at the extreme
corner
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 of
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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 followed by
information
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the information
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 desk and self-service machines.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, corner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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