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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams illustrate the transformation of Porth Harbour from 2000 to the present day.
Overall
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, the harbour has undergone significant development to cater to tourism,
while
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 some areas have remained unchanged, maintaining accessibility for the general public. The most noticeable developments are the addition of tourist-oriented amenities to better accommodate
visitors
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. On the southern shore, a disused castle has been converted into a modern hotel, and the former public beach has been turned into a private facility exclusively for hotel guests. Near the lifeboat station, a section for cafes and shops has been established, enhancing leisure and retail options for tourists.
Moreover
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, a new facility featuring showers and toilets has been built to improve convenience for
visitors
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. On the northern shore, a new dock for passenger ferries has been added and the marina for private yachts has been relocated closer to the hotel, replacing the former fishing boat area. Despite these changes, some areas have remained the same. The car parks on the western side continue to serve
visitors
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 arriving by car,
while
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 the large public beach in the northeast corner has been preserved for general use. These retained features balance the harbour’s modernization by maintaining accessibility for non-tourist-specific
visitors
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Include a short conclusion to summarize the main points more clearly.
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Consider adding more specific examples to strengthen your points and descriptions.
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You have clearly described the changes in the harbour with good detail.
coherence
The overall structure of the essay is clear, making it easy to follow.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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