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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps delineate the structural transformation of a bookstore from the year 2000 to the present day. Notably, the layout has evolved from a predominantly book-centric arrangement to a contemporary design that incorporates leisure spaces alongside traditional book sections. In the 2000 layout, the bookstore featured a conventional configuration, wherein the upper portion was predominantly allocated to two Fiction sections,
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 the lower
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 was dedicated to Non-fiction. The middle area housed the Cookery, Hobbies, and Art sections, with the Travel
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 positioned near the entrance and the New
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 adjacent to the service desk.
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 arrangement emphasized a clear segregation of genres and categories, catering primarily to traditional book consumers.
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, the current configuration reflects significant modernization. The upper
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 now comprises four distinct areas: Art, Hobbies, Travel, and New books, with Fiction relegated to a subordinate status. The previous Non-fiction
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 has been eradicated in favour of a modern café, thereby transforming the customer experience.
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, the central area has been enhanced with the introduction of reading tables, promoting a communal atmosphere. Despite these extensive modifications, the fundamental locations of the entrance, New books, and the service desk have maintained their positions, signifying a degree of continuity amidst the broader changes.

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