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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table demonstrates
population
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 data in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 1980 and 2002. It is obvious from the table that the
population
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 for both genders, birth rate, average annual
population
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 growth, and
population
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 aged over 65 were compared, and they showed changes some abruptly,
slightly
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and slightly
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, and the others remained the same. In 1980, the
population
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 of
Australia
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 was almost 15 million, and after 22 years, it increased by around one-third. At the same time, the number of people in
Malaysia
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 doubled.
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, the rate of people who were above 65 years surged slightly between the two periods, in both countries.
On the other hand
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, female and male percentages in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 showed some signs of stability. The birth rate dropped in
Australia
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 to 1.3, but in
Malaysia
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, it fell by around one-third.
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, the percentage of the average annual
population
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 growth in
Australia
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 is almost the same, but in
Malaysia
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, it decreased from 2.4
percent
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per cent
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 to 2.1
percent
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per cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population
  • growth
  • increase
  • larger
  • smaller
  • area
  • million
  • year
  • comparison
  • features
  • rate
  • significantly
  • higher
  • density
  • around
  • approximately
  • period
  • higher
  • lower
  • information
  • reporting
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