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The table below shows the number of Australian students studying abroad from 2004 to 2006.

The table below shows the number of Australian students studying abroad from 2004 to 2006.
The bar chart gives information about The amount of Australian
students
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 who studied overseas between 2004 and 2006.
Overall
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,the number of
students
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 in the USA and New Zealand was more in demand than in Germany and Japan,
while
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 the number of
students
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 in the UK has not changed in three years.
To begin
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 with, Germany and Japan had the lowest figures three times,
near
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 100 learners each year.The UK was the average chart among other countries ,in 2004 exactly 1500
students
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 studied there,in 2005 and 2006’s slightly increased by 50
students
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 to about 1550. New Zealand was much more needed,in 2004 it was just over 2500 Pupils, for the following years it hasn't changed that much.The highest figure for each year was the USA,it is highly demanded by
students
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,in the first
year
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year,
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 it was 2500 learners from Australia,in 2006 it was just under 3000 pupils.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • students
  • study
  • abroad
  • number
  • total
  • years
  • increase
  • reflect
  • interest
  • global
  • experience
  • opportunities
  • universities
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