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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
The chart illustrates the data about the proportion of travellers who used various types of vehicles to commute to
work
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 in a European city during a period from 1960 to 2000.
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, It can be clearly seen that the proportion of
car
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 users grew slightly over the period,
while
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 the percentage of other means of transportation declined. As the chart shows,in 1960, about 34 % of people who commuted to
work
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 on
foot
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, compared to only approximately 5 % of individuals travelled by
car
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. The proportion of those who used vehicles was around 25 % and 18% respectively. Interestingly, the usage of buses and cars rose significantly, and commuting to
work
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 on
foot
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 and by bike fell slightly in 1980.
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 the bus and
car
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 indexes were about 26 % and 23 %, roughly 20% and 17 % of people went to
work
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 by bicycle and on
foot
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.
At the end
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 of the term, approximately 35 % of people went to
work
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 by
car
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 and it was twice as much
as
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higher than other trends in 2000. The population of bus, bicycle and
foot
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 users were around 16 %, 6% and 9 %, respectively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, car, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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