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Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages for individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People differ in their opinions about doing the same
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 for their entire working life. Some refuse that,
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 others believe that it affects the community, workers, and firms positively. I will discuss both views and give my perspective, and why I agree with the second view. On the one hand, a part of us thinks changing
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 is more beneficial for people, companies, and society for two reasons. Primarily, changing occupations would give us a sense of refreshment.
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, I remember when I started my career, I was too excited, and the feeling when I entered the classroom as a teacher was amazing.
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, I had the same feeling when I worked with the statistics ministry.
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 these are two different
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, I
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 thrilled each time.
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,
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 changing can give us a wide range of experiences.
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, teaching gave me a lot of skills, like being patient with children and writing on the board.
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 working as a supervisor in the math department at the same school was too different, it gave me new skills, like leading my colleagues.
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, we believe that building a career is more important for all. The first reason behind
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 claim is that we need experts for the development of societies, countries, and individuals. To illustrate, to enhance one field,
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 as communication, we need experts, those who have a wide range of information,
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 scientists, to do new research. Another reason, jumping from
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 to
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 can not give us high salaries; every time we will be treated as beginners.
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, if I want to hire an employee, it does not matter how many
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 he has held; I will see what he has in the same field. In my opinion, for the reasons that I mentioned in the second body, I believe that building a great CV in one sector is way better than several different
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. To sum it up, both of them have benefits, changing
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 can work with some people, like if they need a refreshment.
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, some individuals do not need those benefits, like me. I care about my salary and the positives for my community and society.

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Make sure each paragraph clearly connects to the essay question. The introduction should give a clear outline of what will be discussed.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'however' and 'furthermore' to help the reader follow the flow of ideas better.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
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Your personal examples make the essay relatable and engaging. Sharing your experiences adds a nice touch.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • career progression
  • skillset
  • employee retention
  • workplace culture
  • job market
  • professional development
  • mobility
  • adaptability
  • specialization
  • career stability
  • economic climate
  • networking opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • employee engagement
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